THURSDAY’S BLOG
When I was in my country with my family we all lived together, but one day my mother got a visa to travel to this country. I did not want that she was going to travel, because I was going to miss her a lot. But it was necessary that she travel because our economy was not good.When she was here she worked very hard and she always was calling and sending money to us .
After that my mother brought my old sister and now we were going to miss two people in our family.It was very difficult to us , I felt like alone and so sad when it happened.
After three years my father got an idea that he my other sister and I were going to travel to this country and to be together again.We had to travel two months to get here. However now we are together and it was an experence that I never want to happen again.
Have a good weakend. Happy Chrismas.
raquel q dises yo soy serio
R, this is very emotional. It sounds like a very difficult experience! Being separated from your parents is the hardest thing…but, you made it and now you will be stronger. I hope you will never have to separate from your family again.
Your conclusion is powerful: However now we are together and it was an experence that I never want to happen again.
You have one run-on–use a period instead of a comma: It was very difficult to us , I felt like alone and so sad when it happened.
I am sure you appreciate your family more:>
Ms. F